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Skidtz Approved
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Ladies And Gentlemen, I am a new EZFolk member (though I've been lurking around as a Guest for three months - since I bought my first Uke -Electric Applause Ovation-). The other night a girlfriend was lamenting to me about a recent break up - and we put together some silly limerick; i thought it'd be great to write a foolish song and play it for her on the uke to make her feel better. The song is called "Texas Took My Love Away". I was hoping someone (or many someones) could help me with the music and/or improving the lyrics? We live Down Island, and I'd hoped to give it a tropical sound. Many thanks, in advance, for direction/suggestions/etc! Texas took my love away that land of desert, wind and thorns cowboy boots and cattle horns where never ocean's mighty roar upon the tepid gulf coast shore Texas took my love away. Mesquite Bush and Juniper Trees seduced him from my palm frond's breeze cactus, sagebrush, horses, sand the muddy, sluggish Rio Grande have won him from this lush and green hybiscus, seajade, jasmine scene Texas took my love away I see upon his lovely face the transformation taking place eyes that sparkled in the tropical sun pinched and dried in the desert one his lips, his cheeks, his chocolate hair cracked and brittle from the sunburned air the skin my fingers oft carressed brown and leathered from duress His equatorial ruddy glow Toughened now a murky Sallow Texas took my love away Darn that cheap and tawdry whore With bangles, rouge, and tricks galore who, from this balmy island nest snatched my lover from my breast i sit beside the rocky shore i surf, i fish, but laugh no more alone upon my uke i play for Texas took my love away Cuidate, -Skidtz- ps. if this is not the right location for this post, please let me know where better to locate it! 
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Preston Approved 
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Great lyrics. Don't need improvement. Now I wanna hear it as a song. By the way, is it a true story?
____________________ My EzFolk Page: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1072 |
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Skidtz Approved
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Yes... that's rather the problem. I don't know how to write songs.  Any suggestions? Oh... And yes. Very true. All the tragedy and drama and late nights in the hammoc over a bottle of wine. Poor girl. But she'll be fine, I wager.  Last edited on Sat Oct 14th, 2006 01:49 am by Skidtz |
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Philj200 Approved 
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Damn thick fingers! Sorry about the double entry. Last edited on Thu Oct 26th, 2006 11:45 pm by Philj200 ____________________ My MP3 Section: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1143/ My Myspace area: http://myspace.com/philj200 |
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Philj200 Approved
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Skidtz, If you have a moment, take a look, or a listen to a vesion of your song on my section of the MP3 cache. I'd post it here but the cut and paste function seems to be off-line tonight. I simplified a bit. It's in B-major and I tried to give it an island lilt. Forgive the voice. http://ezfolk.com/audio/play.php?mode=song_hifi&band_id=1143&song_id=5982 Last edited on Thu Oct 26th, 2006 11:44 pm by Philj200 ____________________ My MP3 Section: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1143/ My Myspace area: http://myspace.com/philj200 |
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Preston Approved
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Philj, great job on the song. It looks like we have a potential for another great songwriting duo in the tradition of Learner and Lowe or Gilbert and Sullivan; Philj and Skidtz ( or Skitdz and Philj). The song has just the right Island flavor and the lyrics are spot on.
____________________ My EzFolk Page: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1072 |
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Philj200 Approved
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Thanks Preston. I hope Skidtz isn't pissed off at the wonton or is it wanton (one's a soup, the other is disregard) hash I made of his lyrics. Mispronouced a few of the words I kept too. Another little adventure in multitracking.
____________________ My MP3 Section: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1143/ My Myspace area: http://myspace.com/philj200 |
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ShadyHarrison Approved 
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Phil- the former is the soup (wonton) the latter is disregard (wanton)- I think!
____________________ "If I'm going to see the light, maybe I will be alright, for now I'm headin' down that centre line" Mike McLaren. http://ezfolk.com/audio/Shady my ezfolk audio site- Yahoo! |
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Philj200 Approved
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I dunno. I was in a small, awful Chinese restaurant and what they did to the soup was wanton destruction.
____________________ My MP3 Section: http://ezfolk.com/audio/bands/1143/ My Myspace area: http://myspace.com/philj200 |
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